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: F: `6 E( g: U# [7 {$ U3 IWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 ; V2 x, m+ q: B朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。+ D1 g+ I3 [$ a: m& {: L
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！9 J2 \8 F2 i" A" O% @7 _" E
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. 5 y( D, d) J# ]' ~6 p$ a联系电话 0210625999 - p& L0 D r8 z% M f ' M! f- ^7 X4 H1 g/ A% J
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 {! Z" {& K/ C/ m: H2 W房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。 1 A3 ^7 B# I0 [( {' h" I6 vThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。9 m, n, I2 I. a9 ?( `) q. X
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。! C% G1 i3 w) n$ g/ ?; b
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。: |' Y, D5 e4 h: W* T
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 + ?8 r- i1 E! ~+ N, y) SThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
这段英文存在较多语法错误和表达不地道的地方，以下是修改后的版本及解析，使其更符合英语表达习惯和商务沟通的得体性：. ]1 q7 m9 M( X! o- n
" l9 \) Y5 }& K& p* L0 P% t原始错误分析7 v& l9 p6 G. }/ m! Z( E
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1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。 % ~4 k$ u- M% T1 {) ^" i& e8 w 1 h, W5 m$ K/ x" K' b8 Q0 V
2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。7 b: ~& T6 \5 S2 ~# I
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3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。& W) o6 R% S# D; N
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4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。- b x: {5 Y- M1 v* t0 [+ ~) M
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Good afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you?6 O& ?$ {9 o j7 H6 o- b
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1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。1 G8 F! o/ x$ l3 U# G
1 s: C; T4 u* b- E4 Y" z+ ]+ x2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。, ~; p( {, P, [1 R7 z6 X: n
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 ) ]2 V N1 s" q2 K) m) Q! N j' |+ vThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。' Z! K1 b, Z" T% x9 v, V
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。9 V4 Y2 k% Q9 F
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。" \8 L v0 n4 e* q8 r& q S
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 `4 V1 E1 l6 C3 M) MThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 . j; v7 w: N: ]$ N房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 7 ^' n: g) p+ B% H9 g h' _9 ]This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！5 A c- }, l" X% z
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！- k8 q1 H4 a+ a9 M. w
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 4 ]: `. f3 C0 l) Q+ _) c房屋舒适，环境好。/ s( Z! F& y- F) f3 E- q$ L
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！( M A4 I5 u" e) @6 }' c
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！9 s, Q1 T; s" x1 M: Z" E* {+ _
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 4 w8 |* X+ k& Y; v4 E- U房屋舒适，环境好。( s W+ M% G4 N# w$ g
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ * y( n0 q. u) g4 _/ z" O# n绝对舒适，绝对优惠！8 W( Y9 Q7 s# m# F* B
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。) n! D/ c+ S1 S" F+ s/ \' T
房屋舒适，环境好。( {9 l& b; p# Y5 y$ G
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。( H) r5 G C8 z/ R
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。9 ~7 ?2 |* o; Y: @
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！) H& ^7 |0 Y4 ~5 x
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. 3 u+ e- d7 ]; y$ `$ q' q( ^联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 9 ^/ G* i! c7 \* A: N* N+ ?朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。! l. m! E W5 ~& O+ j9 y8 S* a$ @
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ / Q- C# V3 ]% u. g8 nThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. 2 ~9 x) n' H' g1 G8 r3 ^) {联系电话 0210625999
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