本帖最后由 爱美丽的小肥猫 于 2025-5-29 18:01 编辑 $ J' }: E; c0 J, V ' C& v) I2 [& E- z0 Y4 N% }Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 2 X# ], c Z: ?& Y" i, w7 {6 U朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 & l% \3 @/ L/ h- _' E, i舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ " `8 \, T" V7 p6 e' S! k( N% jThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.: v- \6 W7 y4 l# R, V" ~! n6 W
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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 & F' ]% o- B- R4 q/ Z房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。9 m2 T& U& A; L% E
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 2 b% n8 {& v* w* B" |( z3 {" i房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。; T' s3 q8 }' j0 E9 j) Z
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。! g5 P' t( b2 _1 u) H/ I
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 & @7 _/ }! L" U: f: J1 U+ z& ^This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
这段英文存在较多语法错误和表达不地道的地方，以下是修改后的版本及解析，使其更符合英语表达习惯和商务沟通的得体性：; h. }' g# z! K5 e. W) H0 I2 L
( A9 e5 C3 B# s, {- z; N原始错误分析 ) x& W7 F" R; F! M1 q$ u 7 }; `2 c' d( S! ?$ l( W, f, j
1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。 % F% g6 W z5 ]! I ! E4 ]7 ~& {% c2 c4 \* s2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。 1 K& `- f3 Z8 W% y7 | 5 Q3 d1 r, x ]3 {2 K3 a6 O3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。* j+ l5 H( z: J' F6 h, G
9 u. v% a( `9 l# r( U! {! Z4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。# I( B; }& Y1 I! ` Y
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修改后的版本7 J# f( j7 S" Q8 `$ ?* r
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Good afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you? 0 z6 S/ L/ P! b$ K @. D& B* R " {! ?3 k }) j4 G/ B7 q4 @$ Y$ _
版本说明 " r- c/ D7 P% I7 r6 J# s / N; X/ h; R3 u1 y3 P! y2 I5 C
1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。' B1 B! Q8 Y- v$ L$ x
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2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
# w1 w) z8 W) L! O; E+ oWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。; s. f1 |- C9 C2 o4 J: H/ k( g
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 ) |' R% C0 c" c. iThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 ) A! n4 }2 l& C3 e房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 ! }7 i* X3 e% y' U6 j* W# u& F: tThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 2 D% R0 E: T# ^8 E3 P房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。0 {1 D- j$ y9 g0 Q- t
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 8 K0 ~/ [9 `/ G2 j$ Y; l6 ]8 f房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。4 j) ^$ ^7 s I
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！: d, F @8 Z; X# H: `
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！4 C* Z) A, B% H) W+ ^$ d
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 7 j5 A7 k( U) }9 ]房屋舒适，环境好。( N! \. {4 o8 m
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！. [, z, s; |( L0 x7 p, \3 @( ~- E
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！4 v+ u4 A6 h5 G! C0 H }3 f) b
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。- Q1 b1 i; e: Y& K! Q% k; h/ W
房屋舒适，环境好。; r n8 t3 l4 Q- m" @
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ / Z( d, V/ c; R+ d' U7 B! ]绝对舒适，绝对优惠！ ' r, | w4 x% K3 f( r# e: eWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 ) O$ M' {+ b- l' d房屋舒适，环境好。% }1 A% k3 ]9 Z0 X
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。! T0 {7 G' w6 i5 J" T6 A
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 - A! `& x" t- ]! O5 i; x( `/ m舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ 2 o8 J, b. Y M' B7 L. A6 lThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.$ }. u& ?: U6 K& h. }# ]
联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。& L5 w& X ? C% w
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。$ p* v* G$ W. ^; d1 R0 ]
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ 0 w/ F- R- ]( h5 w/ lThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.- D S; }1 @$ f7 z/ w/ [* e& G. R
联系电话 0210625999
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