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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 ; j" W2 m6 _/ a* h1 w5 U! e% N$ h/ E朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。7 @, L$ Y3 U+ Q/ z5 H6 ?' |
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ % r v- O( I; O" f n0 n2 A6 TThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids." O" J: {1 o' y% O9 d
联系电话 0210625999 # U% ~0 A* |4 _2 S2 z; S & V. U( Z) N% O% l6 D. s
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 & k! b; U% Y d# B0 E' B房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。 : O4 y& H( e8 vThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。: I. } ]* k2 t& D W
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 9 ^2 R! Z: i3 m& LThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。5 c" H7 \9 H4 k4 J; \' c7 ]: A3 O
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 ' i3 f% j0 J2 W7 GThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
这段英文存在较多语法错误和表达不地道的地方，以下是修改后的版本及解析，使其更符合英语表达习惯和商务沟通的得体性： 6 Y7 G( f, f/ D, `- q5 k! ^ R , N8 z& s- ]2 q: g原始错误分析 0 M8 y7 x- W: G* e2 I9 p 5 v7 ^% y) V/ I6 s6 F
1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。8 {$ g5 O* }, H2 W3 G
9 H' k2 l6 W! J: d! T2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。 6 \% _: z5 G9 o4 U- ?2 i* A$ K; { ( {" C- A9 A) T; L( _6 v
3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。9 U. a: `9 |# ~, l6 s$ Z% p
. e4 P* U: f# K! P& i, t4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。 - P4 t# D' C3 o' f, K! \ 0 g( B; S; y3 D
修改后的版本 ) k5 s) r" |# m2 F. s9 \ 1 `2 P" h* C- x+ V. i( EGood afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you?) {3 J0 v+ Y2 g' O% f
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& ~: L* A5 j- z, Z9 }2 V1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。% d V) M O1 l! V
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2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 6 E. k3 ?. [: M# @4 N. ~. ^/ o房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。1 Z, i# _" c% q% G' R( t
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。! P4 |4 ^$ Z) g' a
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。1 Z) [5 x9 B3 B+ }* X0 p
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 6 {0 o6 J6 H' C房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 / k1 N9 w& k* K% z, TThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。$ E5 a1 U% ^/ n* h* q% ~9 j2 ?1 s A
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。+ V6 w% a2 K" U0 n% C8 {& {
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ $ p w, Y4 `% |绝对舒适，绝对优惠！& Z+ ?% ?% H3 t
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。2 S. m+ S. I$ X& i6 l
房屋舒适，环境好。4 p; {4 M8 ]+ h
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！% l0 `1 ]: A2 J
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！" g& M j. h% ~+ e3 K- p
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。/ P {) J" o* C# S* n
房屋舒适，环境好。& H2 H% S1 T& z q, t0 X
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ " V9 r; P* U* B/ N4 i) d绝对舒适，绝对优惠！+ W8 [ m; B0 u' e0 Z8 Q5 a: D4 E
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。) r3 e' l/ n2 D# y
房屋舒适，环境好。/ a, H* r" M8 X
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 % K4 W; T- ^0 U, R朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。* D9 C+ s0 F: q5 q3 b( I
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ " D( x/ l- N9 i$ oThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.2 ^7 c V: Y _4 K7 s' d) o
联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。) X6 p/ a4 K9 T+ T1 [
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。$ R8 X! v5 ?" o, U1 c6 s" `
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！) w9 t; W) f. E2 n7 A
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. 0 R' w, I' E; I; ~) k/ h0 _: e联系电话 0210625999
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