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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。7 t/ l! ^# W2 \8 @
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。& q2 u# M4 \8 ^, V* F0 e
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ " U) g& q, r/ P# ?5 O J& h" {6 ]& }This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. 0 M- `1 K" M2 A3 y联系电话 0210625999, A2 B1 [3 Z* h+ M! I; }$ \& O$ l
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。5 J4 g' I% {& }; T- b: }
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。. z$ W+ U+ o0 q$ T+ i A) D
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 , M o; ~& U( v/ @房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。; m$ |9 [* i+ t
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。0 W$ I* v0 F. ?/ h, `
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 6 S4 S+ H9 L( s' r( ZThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
这段英文存在较多语法错误和表达不地道的地方，以下是修改后的版本及解析，使其更符合英语表达习惯和商务沟通的得体性： 8 r8 a2 [, s0 s, l" f" ?. P ! W! L# B. @: m8 J2 i5 c2 n2 y- ?原始错误分析, h0 V. X& w1 \, `
$ C- g, Y+ R1 P: T9 L: [- \/ [. M, H1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。0 v4 _( \: _- i3 q) g/ x9 V
! M- Q( l2 {' h1 o3 d2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。 , L4 b F0 B5 d$ G) F% k! N s% [$ l P , \* _5 ]8 ^3 b; S4 N' P( [5 i
3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。4 l2 O1 O2 P$ @- h- w5 z
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4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。1 l& s5 x* z) R# U
/ u) o5 V3 V2 E7 L修改后的版本 * t! z8 L5 A& ?9 a* p - D; c$ K4 b6 G' H9 Q$ gGood afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you? . F) o2 d( L: E ! e, Y3 b& x4 r7 k4 r3 B
版本说明3 P2 k3 E' m/ S1 h8 k
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1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。 # G1 z1 c8 {" e6 e 8 W; L& |5 _' {
2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
0 q+ t. ?; n3 Q* DWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 ( c8 ?2 w7 L6 {5 _房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 % I1 e* h: ?. @4 UThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 5 I. P7 r5 m/ j4 b* Y& A房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 ' H1 w2 M* I: t& RThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。5 X1 v- F9 d7 |5 x; d7 W
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。$ Y0 z8 i% G! v) E3 l) R
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。2 v% ]9 Q3 W1 _& H" J7 X
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。/ ^# I, P3 b4 A M4 ? p+ Q9 j
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ # y; Y& l% t- G B3 K5 w绝对舒适，绝对优惠！3 J6 |5 M3 F" B. h' ]
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 4 f, I3 X* z$ s6 n8 ]" ^房屋舒适，环境好。3 ]4 S) |& g( G. w
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！. W* {$ d, i- q( Q
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！ 6 C- I$ q! }% ]' X( VWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 ( M) p( |1 @& n! r! C房屋舒适，环境好。& F9 ` G p% o* W
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ ; {- i. l2 Y i绝对舒适，绝对优惠！. {, D; Q; V2 A% x7 }
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 9 z! r" A# v1 U# A: h$ w5 O, A! d* V房屋舒适，环境好。 # G3 B( d$ X6 x7 {0 y6 @This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。- _: x9 I* f0 {
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 1 m, G4 m* f; E; ~" j: H1 s舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！) c' F) R; @4 S7 M$ r5 }; U- y
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.2 D+ E8 U# v# [5 A
联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 4 P" @; d) ]( }/ S# K8 t朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 ' h, w8 d' t* k- P. L舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ 2 {9 z# f( Q+ UThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. " R& J( U. C1 d0 r- ?6 S联系电话 0210625999
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