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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。: w: s0 `5 ~8 {
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。/ @0 T `2 t7 r& C4 a& f% R
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！# g% p* g% @# ~4 u7 C
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.7 G0 k8 V& _" a3 w! t( S
联系电话 0210625999 ! G2 j( O, `- h0 U p( H! B : w0 h! p" n6 h6 V, T
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 # y! Q6 z, z# R房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。" p. X7 ]5 |9 x$ G9 @2 e$ j
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。& |. H s& K& d5 Y0 C- F* D
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 $ I# f$ a/ R# Q% b* EThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 . p( p9 P0 ?; w) j4 u4 ?. \6 `' ^房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。) P }6 U$ N* M1 z" H
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
这段英文存在较多语法错误和表达不地道的地方，以下是修改后的版本及解析，使其更符合英语表达习惯和商务沟通的得体性： & o7 X! r- K; |+ |, P& w $ c1 x, }# e2 _: C2 d
原始错误分析 / q6 S4 R1 \/ f# q' ~ 8 y {0 u3 [4 N0 I
1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。 ?& D; z* A6 x( W1 r4 W5 E9 a % P' D6 Z9 u+ z: E ]2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。 + M# z* }* k: ?- I% j& J' O1 g2 {" q! y : i% d" o( q8 n
3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。 $ E) m% N5 @8 o' I ' O: I7 ^* P Z- p: f/ I4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。 1 d @' V' q' ?' O; N7 a # B( \( Q* M! Y/ |! c3 n
修改后的版本+ X5 d6 y$ k5 V% B
6 q2 T! Z6 @; D$ ?2 ? G! D2 jGood afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you? + |% d7 {& y& W: m: l; |, I # z, y/ h, T! [
版本说明 / q( e a J3 S9 V9 [/ B$ G6 x 8 C. {6 J" m& _2 T- m
1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。 3 l) u- }' o: n* c9 b8 Y1 H* m $ w8 ^) I4 S5 i2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
+ _5 {4 b8 C( XWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 $ c% H& m- x* F2 r房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 ( i- y4 Z5 A+ \; ~1 u1 EThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。3 M L2 i5 m; `; N/ [3 r t
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 # Q# l! ^/ Q7 G A7 x' o2 j( }This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。3 g! z% C3 }5 ]2 G- K# d
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。) \6 _! ?! v3 V* r9 `. A9 @! B
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。: \0 l% r D( \4 J; W5 S6 q: Z% j5 P
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。. F, F) z3 I% P% o7 [2 h2 T9 |( Z
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ % h4 z5 }; @1 _ c* C绝对舒适，绝对优惠！; L4 W0 S% @% q1 r9 V
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 k# B! g. p) r! j房屋舒适，环境好。* g0 ]; E( _8 n* t- j8 A+ X9 b
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！5 D* v8 V! H! ?8 W/ l
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！ ' B g' h* G$ ]7 a4 [5 _0 wWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。2 \5 x! p3 p) c7 C+ M# p
房屋舒适，环境好。 3 P$ ]0 l4 h. y2 m& |+ z- I0 rThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ & F9 \0 T# |/ L$ k绝对舒适，绝对优惠！ ! Q8 `8 V, e: y' kWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 ! x. i! k. M: @$ {房屋舒适，环境好。 7 T/ d* U" ~+ M. {/ q* dThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。, ~: p4 a( h2 j. {- P- b3 u, W( V
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。* N. w/ q/ n, O
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ 5 y3 y5 n1 _/ L# f' H' }) [* IThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. ; D, r6 Q5 Y+ z0 }6 P# M联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 , w/ D2 e$ }% J% U+ ~朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。, |- f5 t0 s% Y9 [- e
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！) P1 k; m k9 }' B
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. - b" @; m3 Y6 x. ]- ~联系电话 0210625999
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