9 h' @6 w% B+ z& k7 lWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 ( @9 s, J+ p: {) f) t' g0 l0 V1 w朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 & l% D! P0 s5 }' p& v; l9 W. N舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ 5 _3 } p! ?- v' R. PThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. 6 l0 ?0 \. a; y' ~联系电话 0210625999 ( X' ], I1 t& y5 `- l8 v' N* x( k& t, j- H; _0 n
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 + X$ S/ s- |5 }房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。 ' Y9 u5 v* Y, {+ ?; e0 ~! }- R% jThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。$ @3 ~; F3 i: s
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 - Z, [$ Q" i6 h5 R* ZThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 0 U- v3 K; @' ]2 B4 C; y) `2 v4 `房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 / Y$ |% d; y5 k9 @" LThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
这段英文存在较多语法错误和表达不地道的地方，以下是修改后的版本及解析，使其更符合英语表达习惯和商务沟通的得体性： ) e6 [ x/ I# i9 P$ e3 ` 0 U- ?) J3 k0 N$ ~原始错误分析 : w0 M- W; t8 |6 D' f) S: k 8 a8 E+ @& a2 y3 I( R: e
1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。 $ ]8 ~" K7 M* W6 S' F2 P$ z' C ' a' f- y! P+ W4 ?" L9 \
2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。 4 o( Q! q/ q6 _- E! s( e; ^. I ( p% a K* |! l3 v3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。 + U, _ M+ M* k6 d 2 N" ~7 L7 d: E
4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。1 ?# G( [: ]8 }1 Z
1 h. j- Y; T+ P. ], P3 |' c8 u- L修改后的版本: I0 r8 G& d0 J! M
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Good afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you?) D1 l7 U% Z2 Y8 B+ E C% z& i5 H+ ]
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版本说明 - m' ~: F4 X4 ?9 }$ y " H: ~3 v8 z- V* r- \9 V
1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。% X8 S0 [* g( \% {
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2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
! L5 t6 q' |: f" J JWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 5 c' ~" M- ~2 [房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。% y" K8 E) y- `
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。" s; B, U' a5 _! K
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 3 l7 J; x M' XThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 , Z8 Z6 E" f' N5 q房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 2 X( d+ D7 n7 D: @0 K/ H/ g; zThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。. q+ e' ^, g; ~$ k2 ?8 h
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。+ q9 g! H. z* }& h2 _& m6 `2 W2 W: o
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ & q7 t- f/ R9 k9 D; r7 [; j绝对舒适，绝对优惠！ ; i9 G' a2 k) J/ P( r$ NWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 ( L' h7 s0 v1 X4 k4 f: e: L房屋舒适，环境好。/ U7 I/ F0 ?% w/ p
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！) |# j, S6 f; A. e/ \
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！# G3 f- \0 v" J: @9 z
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 , F" x# _ p' a! y: T) c4 I8 F房屋舒适，环境好。 . P7 W, b, z# X8 C, SThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ ) t1 T# r4 a0 T5 ^绝对舒适，绝对优惠！8 a h# H" t& S' L, j
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。& i* n' I# p8 M) L6 [
房屋舒适，环境好。0 L. f L0 z5 p; l' e# k+ A0 H( t
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。3 h8 q. o/ Z8 h# s
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。: Q8 ~# z7 D; G6 m: j B
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！# Q# i! ~6 l1 P' E
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.3 ^+ f5 z# o8 ]/ q7 n
联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 $ K& V: ^( m) Y& M朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 ! o4 c& P' B* `" ?舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ ! Z7 M! n9 U' a9 b. I7 Q( j4 j* }" oThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. + C+ c i: `9 a/ p% n& _% P" g联系电话 0210625999
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