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Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。6 b9 r" Z- E8 C2 b' U$ e* r
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。: N; R& k1 p, |4 a
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！# C9 V& h' o' W, H
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.) Y0 w6 x* G; |+ s# t) t# `
联系电话 0210625999 6 E' r# t8 a0 z3 q# d( [ 7 t, C9 u* r R) l8 v: r8 Y' W
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。; U$ X0 T( F; G$ l) D
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年。 9 V9 Q& a* C, V, RThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 2 u- ~- u5 D R* U6 W, | _# Y房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 & b$ Z* L. O- X' `7 N IThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairau Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 3 S* K- h! q1 B& P房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月，可协商。 & }3 m, z) K' \, ]" J3 U/ @This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
8 U, O; o: @" g1 i# N6 \' z/ L& }1. “May I ask u that...”：“u”是不正式的缩写，在正式或商务沟通中应避免；“ask”后接宾语从句时，“that”多余，应去掉 。" h; {6 v- g& t8 y, W9 t% a1 b
/ p4 d% g3 q- u: P8 V2. “on holding to buy my car”：表达错误，正确表达应该是“for holding off on buying my car” ，“hold off”表示“推迟”。3 w# u+ }) O1 l# X* N) w& O+ v7 E6 R- i
6 I) |+ [ U* Y' b, O2 p3. “I can get a new WOF & service for u more safety driving”：句子结构混乱，“more safety driving”表达错误，应该用形容词“safer”修饰“driving”，正确句子可以是“I can get a new WOF and service for you to ensure safer driving”。 1 k: y. ~# L3 c( R* G5 j $ ]- [( l$ q6 T) Q! z# \
4. “Is this make u happy?”：语法错误，“is”和“make”不能同时使用，应使用助动词“does”构成一般疑问句，即“Does this make you happy?”。4 |6 O1 G- A @2 B9 I: T4 N7 M$ S
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修改后的版本 . j+ p1 p$ N- p8 \+ j' q; p * S; f$ Q9 `2 ~/ r f, {Good afternoon. May I ask if there's any reason you're holding off on buying my car? I was thinking that I could get a new WOF and service it for you to ensure safer driving. Would this be appealing to you?8 h8 \. h" n4 y/ ]7 r0 Z. n+ h& s
6 Q1 J8 H9 o. t; c1 u1. 整体更自然流畅：使用了更符合日常英语表达习惯的句式，如“May I ask if...” ，“holding off on...” 。 ( o& U3 e- y- H5 B& {! e ! y ~2 K9 b# J5 ?. Z# C% v
2. 更礼貌得体：“Would this be appealing to you?” 比原句“Is this make u happy?” 更礼貌、专业，也更符合商务沟通场景。
8 {8 _+ e7 Z/ Q: p( U0 a" ZWairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。% `* |" H6 F3 k+ J
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 1 J- f7 l" i0 O% IThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 0 Q7 t, J5 ~- U. E房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 : s; i5 [# j! `1 d2 oThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。% a; Y6 h4 |3 g n. q
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 3 }. A. U& W7 e- Y% BThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。0 M6 L# X8 ]- ~6 x$ S
房屋舒适，环境好。朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 $ r8 i$ r# c7 P0 A* v6 NThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！8 u9 N a) s: B, d4 c7 p7 S& j
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！4 A. p) a4 T8 d1 n6 f+ E
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 * l8 c5 f% H7 d房屋舒适，环境好。' R0 `7 X! D% I- R6 f9 H8 Y- Q) c
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！- M% I# H$ A4 x$ b; ?: d" X
绝对舒适，绝对优惠！! s* B& U; [/ l& }% @
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。+ Y# M. r9 _% h
房屋舒适，环境好。 K( g) t2 K* ?9 GThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
空房整租半年到9个月！ % G" W8 p( z; a( r8 g绝对舒适，绝对优惠！ e" a+ Z3 m! D
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 $ @# ?" b6 E& r' z; f: e房屋舒适，环境好。 / y$ T7 U2 \; E9 w1 j$ HThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。 1 l& @+ x7 ]2 _3 p7 r8 @1 b朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。9 X6 [& x' a$ ]4 B
舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ ~2 v. D& U" q0 {, ?8 U7 T' l
This warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids. ( ]" P, X4 ]1 M- ~联系电话 0210625999
Wairu Park 独立house，三卧室，一个卫生间，近paknsave, 和华人超市，近高速。' m; G, q5 u- Z! \3 V
朋友圈朋友亲情价，市场最优惠，空房整租半年到9个月。 $ p' ?* u! p8 P# W' C舒适的房屋，绝对优惠价！ ; y" N. E4 ^( O" a2 W' b' RThis warm and inviting 3-bedroom home features a modern kitchen, spacious living area, well-appointed family bathroom, and separate laundry. Step outside to a sunny deck and private, fully fenced backyard-ideal for morning coffee, weekend BBQs, and a safe play space for kids.5 K0 x- T! w8 g8 B- H
联系电话 0210625999
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